Persuasive Writing - Why kids should learn to swim

Today in Room 7 we have been learning to write a quality middle paragraph. Our purpose for our writing is to persuade children to learn to swim. The main idea of our paragraph is swimming gives students more confidence

Students had to follow the Success Criteria and write one paragraph. Here is the SC and three students writing

SC
- include point of view
- include persuasive point
- write at least 4 sentences about the main idea
- use at least 2 emotive words

Riley

Kids should learn to swim so they can become more confident in the water. They should be confident because there is a lot of water in New Zealand. If they are not confident they will never go into the water and have a marvellous time. They would only be sun bathing on the beach and watching people in the water having an awesome time.  Kids, swimming is an awesome skill so learn to swim!

Sheredon 

Kids should learn how to swim. Swimming is a terrific sport that will help kids confidence in the water, plus if you go fishing you will feel uncomfortable being surrounded by water. So you should learn how to swim so you can have great fun in the water. 

Bradley 

One reason why kids should learn to swim is because it gives your kids more confidence in the water. If you did not have any confidence you would not go in the water at the beach. Also if you are sunbathing and you see people in the water having fun you wont have any fun in the water if you are not confident. Also if you fell off a boat, and you were confident, you will know know how to swim and swim back to the boat.